CWZ juni 2017 · 4 Writing What$do$writersdo? Select topics – select content – select questions...
Transcript of CWZ juni 2017 · 4 Writing What$do$writersdo? Select topics – select content – select questions...
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Hoe schrijf ik een topartikel?
workshop 1CWZ Nijmegen
Annemarie van der Zeeuw
www.focusoptekst.nl/graduate-school
Programma
• De kenmerken van een wetenschappelijke stijl• De fasen in het schrijfproces• IMRaD• Opzet van Inleiding en Discussie• (Figuren en tabellen)• De basis van tekstopbouw: topic and key sentences• De tijden van het werkwoord
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De kenmerken van een wetenschappelijke stijl
YOUR SENSE OF STYLE
1. Are metaphors appropriate in scientific texts?
2. What feature of scientific writing do you consider the most important?
3. How important are style conventions in scientific writing?
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HET SCHRIJFPROCES
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Writing
What do writers do?
Select topics – select content – select questions to answer – find key messages – articulate the point of each paragraph – be clear about aims –add enough meta text – but not too much -gather information – search for more evidence - make a sketch or outline – try to be a fresh reader – formulate key messages – resume or paraphrase ideas of other people – check grammar, spelling, punctuation – hedge conclusions – try to say it in less words or to build shorter sentences - ……. - ……… -‐………
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The simple writing process
Edit, revise, edit…
Write
Plan
Stages of the writing process
Edit
Write – find words
Organize
Select
Plan
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Stages of the writing process
Edit
Write
Organize
Select
Plan CONTENT
FORM
Simon Peyton Jones, Cambridge‘How to write a great research paper’(You Tube)
The first ofSEVEN SIMPLE SUGGESTIONS1. Write early: writing = researching
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The writing process according to Jones
Edit
Rewrite
Analyze
WRITECONTENT
FORM
Split the writing and the thinkingBUT ALSO Write to clarify and develop yourthoughts
• Writing = planning + selecting + structuring + finding words + viewing your text through the eyes of the reader + revising
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So, what helps?
• Work in stages • Save the grammar/spelling/punctuation for last • Be flexible – switch between stages• Talk about your paper with others• Ask for (structured) feedback in an early stage
IMRAD
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The format: IMRDIntroductionWhat is the subject of this study? Why is it important? What do we already know? Whatdo we not know yet? So, what is the problem or reason for this particular study? And: what is the major question of this study?Materials and methodsWhat was tested or investigated? And how did we do it? Under what conditions? ResultsWhat did we find? DiscussionWhat are the major findings? How can we interpret and explain them? What can we derive from them? How do the findings meet or not meet our expectations? What are comparisons with previous studies? What are possible criticisms? What are the strengthsand weaknesses of this study? How should we carry on? ConclusionsWhat is the answer to the major question? What does the answer implicate?
4 sections, 4 purposes
Introduction
motivate your reader, background, importance, your idea
and aim of your research
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4 sections, 4 purposes
Materials and Methods
make replication of results possible + soundness of argument
4 sections, 4 purposes
Results
outline relevant findings, give a picture
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4 sections, 4 purposes
Discussion
reflect on results, give meanings to your findings,
support conclusions, eye for the future
THE INTRODUCTION
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Question Tool Introduction
• What is the topic of this paper?• What is the problem?• Why is it important?• What do we (not) know yet?• How will I search for the answer?
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$4.!What!do!we!(not)!know?!Gap!of!knowledge?!!!!!!
!5.!How!to!find!the!answer?!!!!!!!
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Story line of the introductionTOPIC / MOVE QUESTIONS
ESTABLISHING TERRITORY What is the topic?
ESTABLISHING A GAP
What is the problem?
Why important?
What do we know/what not? Gap of knowledge?
FILLLING THE GAP What research question?
Design or methodology? How to find the answer?
Happiness is infectious• Nicholas Christakis (Harvard Medical School) & James Fowler (University of California)• Data from the Framingham Heart Study (ongoingcardiovascular study, begun in 1948) • Study looked at 5,000 individuals over 20 years
• Happiness spreads like an emotional contagion• When you get happy, the network effect can bemeasured up to 3 degrees• This chain reaction benefits friends’ friends, and yourfriends’ friends’ friends…• Conversely, sadness does not spread J
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funnel shape of introduction
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3 moves of SwalesMove 1 Establishing a territoryClaiming centrality – Making topic generalisations –Reviewing items of previous reserachMove 2 Establishing the gapCounter-‐claiming – Indicating a gap – Raising a question –Continuing a traditionMove 3 Filling the gapOutlining purposes – Announcing present research –Announcing main findings – Indicating article structure
THE DISCUSSION
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Discussion Happiness
• Find the questions that are answered in the discussion section of the Happiness article
Happiness Discussionan outline in questions
1. What is the answer to the main question? -‐> What does this show? -‐> How remarkable is this?
2. How do the results compare with earlier studies? (answer: in line with evolutionary theories)-‐> how does spreading of happiness serve an evolutionary purpose?
3. How can we explain these findings? -‐> various possible mechanisms (1,2,3)
4. What is a surprising finding? What can we learn from that / what can it mean?
5. So what? Relevance? -‐> example (illness)
6. What is the general conclusion? Take home message?
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The discussionTOPIC QUESTION
Bottom line main result(s) message implication
What is an important finding? How do the data support the finding? Or: what is our claim?
Comparison with earlier studies, what is different, what is new?
How does this finding relate to what we already know? Is it affirmative? How? Or how not? And what does that mean?
Explanation, interpretation and mechanisms.:
How can we explain this finding? (If – partly – unexpected) What is solved, what is still unclear?
Weakness/strengths design/methods statistical power
What are limitations / strengths of the study, and how do they support or weaken our claim?
Clinical interpretation and medical relevance
What are implications? What can we derive from this finding? Who benefits?
Conclusion with implication, suggestions
What is the general conclusion? How can we go on from here? Suggestions for further research.
PARAGRAPH STRUCTURE: TOPIC AND KEY SENTENCE
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the topic sentence
Science has shown an impressive growth over past decades and more scientific papers are published now than ever before. Between 1996 and 2011, over 15 million individuals authored around 25 million papers. Owing to expanding research fields, it is increasingly difficult to getstudies published in high impact journals. This is important since.......... Consequently, in order to get published, scientific discoveries can sometimes be exaggerated or the potential implications overstated. Indeed, overinterpretation, overstatement, and misreporting of scientific results have been frequently reported. However, the prevalence of this problem in the scientific literature is unclear.
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The funnel
introduction
details, examples, comparisons, explanation,
argumentation
point (key message)
Treating patients for a complicated Urinary Tract Infection (cUTI) with an oral antibiotic instead of an intravenous antibiotic has several advantages. Often, the administration of intravenous antibiotics provokes specific complications, such as infection of the iv-‐catheter. Also, it implies hospitalization or a specialized home treatment, of which complications like hospital acquired infection, functional decline, venous thrombo-‐embolism, falls, delirium, sleep deprivation, pressure ulcers and readmissions are well known. These risks are avoided by the use of oral antibiotics.
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Book case
First sentence announces content
First element / step / feature / idea
Second element / step / feature / idea
Third element / step / feature / idea
Pulmonary nerve endings were relatively insensitive to phenal diguanide. Of 25 pulmonary nerve endings tested, only 10 were stimulated when this drug was injected into the right atrium, and in only one of these did firing exceed 2.2. impulses/s. If the latter ending is excluded, the average peak frequency of the endings stimulated was only 1.7 impulses/s.
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The pyramid
point(key message)
explanation, argumentation
data, details, further background
Few studies have examined residential exposures to agricultural pesticides and the results from these studies have been mixed. Two studies examined pesticide use in California using the California Pesticide Use Reporting database and childhood cancer incidence rates at the census block group level. These investigators found no associations between agricultural pesticides (individual, chemical groups, or toxicologic groups) and childhood ALL or gliomas, except for a positive significant association between the 90th percentile of propargite, a pesticide used to kill mites, and leukemia. In a case–control study of childhood leukemia in California, Rull et al. compared the density of applied pesticides within half a mile from the birth residence for 213 cases and 268 controls and found positive associations with pesticides categorized into chlorinated phenols, organophosphates, and triazines. However, these findings were only significant at the middle tertile of exposure and the strength of association weakened as exposure increased.
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The spread of happiness seems to reach up to three degrees of separation, just like the spread of obesity and smoking behaviour. Hence, although the person to person effects of these outcomes tend to be quite strong, they decay well before reaching the whole network. In other words, the reach of a particular behaviour or mood cascade is not limitless. We conjecture that this phenomenon is generic. We might yet find that a “three degrees of influence rule” applies to depression, anxiety, loneliness, drinking, eating, exercise, and many other health related activities and emotional states, and that this rule restricts the effective spread of health phenomena to three degrees of separation away from the ego.
The first sentence: topic sentence
The first sentence of a paragraph:• introduces the topic of the paragraph• may signal the move or the question that the paragraph answers• sometimes: provides the central idea (the point or key sentence)
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VERB TENSES
VERB TENSES
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The tenses
PRESENT SIMPLEOTT
I thinkThey find
PAST SIMPLEOVT
I thoughtThey found
PRESENT PERFECTVTT
I have thoughtThey have found
PAST PERFECTVVT
I had thoughtThey had found
Present tense: They say
ü To present general factsü To make author-‐specific citationsü To paraphrase informationü To give an opinionü To state research aims
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Past simple: We analyzed
üTo refer to specific and finished actions, events or states in the past
In your paper: refer to your research and results in Intro + Disc
üElsewhere in your article: often accompanied bya past time marker: in early 2004, two decades ago, yesterday..
Present perfect -‐ We have shown
üTo refer to an unspecified time beforenow, and actions, events or states thatare unfinished or have direct relevanceto the present. In your paper: to refer to recent research and trends (Introduction): direct relevance to current state or knowledge
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In the IntroductionPRESENT SIMPLE
To describe general background in the beginning-‐ The physical process of fragmentation is relevant to…
-‐ Cancer is the main course of death in …..
PRESENT PERFECT
To describe the problem till now (currency):-‐ Persistence has most often been studied in terms of…
-‐ Yet, while several studies have evaluated whether healthierfoods or diets cost more, the evidence has never, to ourknowledge, been systematically reviewed
In the Introduction
PRESENT SIMPLE + PAST SIMPLE for author-‐specificcitations:
Past simple:-‐ Jones et al (2006) measured the components of…. (focus on research: what did they DO)
Present simple:-‐ Huet (2014) mentions the need to investigate (focus on reporting: what do they REPORT)
Here, the past simple is also possible.
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In the Introduction
PRESENT SIMPLE + PAST SIMPLEAt the end of the introduction: -‐ To address this deficiency, we sought to generatenormal and neoplastic pancreatic organoids bymodifying……..
-‐ We hypothesize(d) that…-‐ The aim of our study was…..
In the MethodsPAST SIMPLE (your actions)Other info: other tenses
Although complete masking of interventions was not possible, patients provided written informed consent to participate in their own study group, without being informed of the existenceof another group. This form of masking is common in cluster randomised trials, and avoids potential bias from patients in the control group requesting the intervention or otherwise alteringtheir behaviour. Oncologists and investigators were aware of assignment.
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In the ResultsPAST SIMPLE
Three putative GREs, 3 AREs and 4 C/EBPβ binding sites were predicted on pig 3β-‐HSD gene promoter (Fig. 3a). ChIPassay revealed significantly lower binding of GR to the first and the third predicted GREs on 3β-‐HSD promoter in the liver of EHL piglets (P < 0.05, Fig. 3b). No significant breed difference was observed for the binding of AR or C/EBPβ to 3β-‐HSD promoter in the liver of preweaning piglets (Fig 3c en d).
In the DiscussionMIX
Stating the answer to your question: PRESENT SIMPLE
Our results show that in patients with exacerbationsrequiring hospital admission, a 5-‐day treatment course of 40 mg of prednisone daily is noninferior toa 14-‐day treatment course with respect toreexacerbation.
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In the DiscussionMIX
Reflection on study: PRESENT SIMPLE
Looking back: PAST SIMPLE
Our study has several limitations. When we designedthis noninferiority trial, there was no standard glucocorticoid regimen for the treatment of exacerbated COPD.
Summary
• the three most used tenses: present simple, past simple, present perfect• look back at your research: past simple• reflect on your research: present simple (now)• work of others: present perfect (still important)
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LIJDENDE VORM
The passive: whodunnit?
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Two samples were assessed.
Two samples were assessed.
Actor is not important
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Two samples were assessed.
We assessed two samples.
Actor is not important
Actor is unknown, unimportant or anyone
• The subjects were randomly assigned to one of three conditions.
• The therapeutical potential of fish oil was discussed in an editorial in this journal last year.
• Scientific texts must be spelled correctly.
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We assessed two samples.
Passive voice is leading in Methods section
Actor is not important
............. but not automatically in the other sections of your article
.... because ......
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The active voice is more precise
This method has been shown to be more effective.
This method has been shown to be more effective.
This method is more effective…
X has shown this method to be more effective..
The active voice is more precise
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The active voice is more concise
• As an alternative method, a multicopy mean-‐field approach can also be used.
• A multicopy meanfield approach is an alternative (method).
The active voice is more concise
• When the new protocol was applied, acceptable or better solutions were obtained for each case.
• After application of the new protocol, each case resulted in acceptable or better solutions.
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In summary, we provide, to the best of our knowledge, the first evidence for experience-‐dependent changes in white matter microstructure.
Active voice: to underline your own conclusions and considerations
Active voice: to emphasize a decision
We constructed a sampling frame and selection processto minimize selection biases and maximizegeneralizability of the accumulated evidence.
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•We investigated the antiplaque and surface-‐active properties of mouth rinses containing..…. Additionally the effect of daily use was established..
•We obtained informed consent from 48 adults and placed them into either a training group (n = 24) or an untrained control group (n = 24). .. This was done by….
Combining the two: a better style
Use the passive:
• .…. if the actor is not important
• ….. if describing general facts, relations or associations
• .... and to maintain cohesion..
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Our analysis of scientific abstracts demonstrates thatpositive and—to a lesser extent—negative words are increasingly used over the past four decades. By contrast, this increase was absent for neutral and random words. The increase in positive words could not be attributed togeneral language tendencies as represented by the millionsof printed books searched through in thisstudy. Neither is the increase driven by one or two words, because all wordsshowed increased frequency patterns. Even though the upward trend in positive word use was conserved in high impact journals, this trend was significantly lesspronounced (fig 1⇓). This difference could be the result of...
Use the active:
• ….. to vary your style in Methods and Results
• ..... to underline reasons or goals
• …… presenting your own thoughts